"Forever Overhead" DFW

In DFW's short story he uses the technique of description to write. The use of detail in his writing makes the reader feel as if they are the one at the pool jumping off the diving board. He does not use complicated words but words that are colloquial. I felt as if I was able to hear the radio playing over the pool, and smell the chlorine filled water. Being a former lifeguard, this story truely relates to me and all the aspects I personally dealt with at work. The story almost sent me into a flashback of the times where I was the blonde-haired guard sitting on the stand watching the children jump off the diving board. I have felt, seen, and smelled the same things that DFW described. I believe this almost excessive use of description truely made his story personal and relatable to the readers. He appeals to the readers sense's "Shake off the blue clean. You’re half-bleached, loose and soft, tenderized, pads of fingers wrinkled. The mist of the pool’s too-clean smell is in your eyes; it breaks light into gentle color. Knock your head with the heel of your hand. One side has a flabby echo." This sentence provides many examples of sight, sound, and touch. Just including such desciption in my own stories will further help me to become a better writer.